Actually, it works better if I bump the contrast which darkens the background and makes Lincoln stand out a little more.
I disagree with you about the type. The visual is horizontal, and the line breaks I have used are natural to the flow of the thoughts (elements) of the text. But thanks for the comment. This is exactly the kind of feedback I am looking for.
Well, the statue is shot from the left side at, so the view isn't straight-one to begin with. Anyway, I recropped and centered the photo by interpolating a couple of measurements, and then centered the type. The tighter crop, and more playing with the lighting also helps, I think.